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THE CLOCK EATER

The Clock Eater loves the taste of fine time
Sauteed in juicy New York minutes and served
With seconds spiced with instants and moments.
He’s a founding member of the clean Plate Club.

The Clock Eater does not wear a watch.
To him there is only this moment in time,
Like a freshly baked roll it’s aromatic
Impatiently waiting to be devoured.

The Clock eater doesn’t often share
The banquet that is on his plate,
Perhaps a nibble now and then
To ease the other diner’s wait.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Colorado River Valley, Nevada

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Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

The poem

Is poetically or ironically clothed in metaphors. There's more to it than meets the eye.
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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

Some pieces beg...

for at least a little punctuation
I see this one as one of those.

It also needs the continuance of thought
rather than each line being a statement.

Continuance of thought can be fixed
by the use of lower-case letters, in the next line
rather than capitalizing each and every line.

The use of commas showing pauses in certain lines, can be most effective.

This the way that I would write this piece:

The Clock Eater loves the taste of fine time
Sauteed in juicy New York minutes, and served
with seconds, spiced with instants and moments
He's a founding member of the Clean Plate Club

The Clock Eater does not wear a watch
To him, there is only this moment in time
Like a freshly baked roll, it's aromatic
impatiently waiting to be devoured

The Clock Eater doesn't often share
the banquet that is on his plate
Perhaps a nibble now and then
to ease the other diner's wait

Of course, I may be putting the emphasis in the wrong places
so, it is up to you to determine how to arrange it.
I like the theme; the thoughts are certainly provoking!

~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 8 months ago

Time

Is certainly precious and goes quickly if we look away for just a second. Sounds like the Clock Eater enjoys living in the moment and savoring every second. Great write!