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Close Your Eyes My Dear

Close your eyes
my dear
and drift off into
sleep

For one day when
you wake
you will see all this
has been a dream.

Hold on to your
teddy tight
and dream of lands
so far away

become a prince or a
princess and rule
the world some day.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft