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Cock-a-doodle-doo

interpreted as Adieu
to one of the billions
constituting the human zoo
but his general humble self
ANTONYMS of avaricious,
braggadocious, capricious,
disgracious, edacious, ferocious,
gynomonoecious, hellacious,
industrious, judicious, lubricious,
mendacious, nonconscious,
oversuspicious, perspicacious,
rampacious, specious,
tenacious, unveracious
seditious and vicious.

While yours truly
no spring squawking chicken married
to hen pecking wife
this old Rooster
weathered his share of strife
reading and writing
the extent of my nightlife
lived as solitudinarian
many years of my half-life
hoops to experience posthumous
fame and fortune during my afterlife.

I imagine dragons puffing away
creating smoke filled enclosure
concomitantly compounding
the steaming hot hell hole
whereat shock of dismay
writ large on my ashen countenance
registered shock barely discernible
after yours reluctantly
shuffled thru the heavily
garish gargoyle gateway
courtesy analogy within Plato's Republic
relating how allegory of the cave
evinces shadowy contortions
eerily resembling Jonbenet.

A haunting spectre
regarding unsolved crime
years after hiring the best gumshoe
"Watching the Detectives"
the latest in a line of Florsheim
ace sleuths scoured the premises
analogous to scouting out data breaches
utilizing assertive techniques I'm
learning after graduating
from the school
of hard knocks
(which noggin of mine
suffered severe pummeling)
feel like a sourpuss
after sucking the juice
one after another life lime
to alleviate S curve vee
that rendered me toothless
as evident when I smile
with inflamed gums that outshine
blinding the poor sucker reading this rhyme
that might rank as a futile endeavor,
whereat paying undermine
precious funds of mine to kick back
and relax resolving compromised
data courtesy goinvisible dot com
to erase my digital FOOTPRINTS.

Please if someone may be altruistic
to help me batten down
the figurative hatches
to avoid cyberpunks
gobbling up personal data of mine
analogous to a rogue going ballistic
at leave (after the remains of the day)
lovely bones of mine
getting transfixed courtesy
bleached blond bombshell
in the virtual sun
the telltale sign of cannibalistic
a veritable wolf in sheep's clothing
analogous to deterministic
charlatan weaving a wide whirled web
immune to small medium at large
uttering one incantation after another,
which yields null results,
where state of the art exorcistic
attempts backfires and renders fatalistic
all creatures great and small
wise and wonderful
in close proximity
after ever so gradualistic
attempts made
even incorporating humoristic
parries and thrusts
with double entendres galore
implementing spur of the moment
ad libbed individualistic
harried styled and swiftly tailored
custom made donning jingoistic,
which ingenious (cheap) tricks
only add insult to injury
even after administering
old fashioned love song
transcribed and steeped
linkedin with kabbalistic
true to the words
of the all poetry knowing
strict codas reached
during the height
of influence in the later Middle Ages
and still remains significant in Hasidism.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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About the Author

Region, Country: PA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Burns, Charles Dickens, Robert Frost, Matthew Scott Harris, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Sylvia Plath, Gary Snyder, Henry David Thoreau, Walt Whitman

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Neopoet AI [2025-04]

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem presents a dense and complex tapestry of ideas, weaving together personal reflection, linguistic playfulness, and cultural allusions. The extensive use of antonyms ending in "-cious" creates a rhythmic and mnemonic device that both challenges and engages the reader, though it occasionally risks overwhelming the narrative flow. The interplay between the metaphor of the rooster and the human condition is intriguing, suggesting resilience and solitude amid strife, yet the connection could be clarified to strengthen thematic coherence.

The allusions to Plato’s Allegory of the Cave and the JonBenet Ramsey case introduce a layer of philosophical and societal commentary, but their integration feels somewhat abrupt and may benefit from more explicit linking to the poem’s central concerns. The shift toward cyber-security and digital footprints introduces a contemporary dimension, reflecting anxieties about privacy and identity; however, the dense syntax and frequent neologisms can obscure meaning, potentially distancing readers.

The poem’s tone oscillates between somber introspection and sardonic humor, with inventive wordplay and internal rhymes that demonstrate linguistic dexterity. To enhance accessibility and emotional impact, consider varying line length and punctuation to improve pacing and clarity. Additionally, refining some of the more elaborate compound adjectives and metaphors could help maintain reader engagement without sacrificing the poem’s intellectual richness.

Overall, the poem ambitiously tackles themes of identity, vulnerability, and modern existential threats through a distinctive voice and layered imagery. Focused revisions aimed at clarifying thematic connections and streamlining complex passages would amplify its resonance and readability.

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