Coffee Shop

Cold, I pull my coat to me,
near the place where we started
A shelter for my thoughts
I pass almost daily

Your cure for a hardness of the heart,
still the compass of my affection,
became lyrics I couldn’t improve upon

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Geezer

2 years 5 months ago

I like that...

you still think of the coffee shop as the place where you had your heart melted. Well done, minimal words and so much said.
Your title is good, the theme is great, the theme is universal and I love the way you shot straight to the end with your story.
Nice job, ~ Geezer.
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Michael Anthony

2 years 4 months ago

Thanks Geez! Glad you liked

Thanks Geez! Glad you liked this one.

Best

Michael Anthony

2 years 4 months ago

Thanks Kat! Appreciate you

Thanks Kat! Appreciate you sharing your thoughts on this.

Cheers

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Now this is great

You’re saying an awful lot.
The first line is more than it seems. It is cold when we maybe don’t have that “compass for affection”. It’s very warm when we do get to a place like that.

Then of course the literal meaning of the poem on the surface is just gorgeous

Tim

Michael Anthony

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you Tim! I always

Thank you Tim! I always appreciate you sharing your thoughtful comments.

Best