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Apr 05, 2025
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Cold Orbit
I sent my love through static air,
past stars that never blink.
You waved from Earth. I can’t wave back.
What next? I watch the planet shrink.
I told myself the moon was kind,
though it couldn’t speak my name.
I made my bed on orbit’s hum,
and feathered dreams of fame.
The signal cracked with ash and fire,
a last message: ‘Brace, impact, gone.’
The world slipped into silence,
but the sky played on and on.
Now you return to me in loops,
a flicker trapped in time.
Each orbit brings your voice again,
still asking, am I fine?
Alone, bound tight in captive hours,
I choke on bile of my remorse.
My time burned out in meteor showers,
this mission dead, off course.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
2 months 3 weeks ago
Exactly...
the type of scene that you might encounter, if you were in a static loop. A place where you just get the same scene over and over again. I get it! ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord
2 months 3 weeks ago
Thanks Geezer for reading and
Thanks Geezer for reading and commenting. Ruby xx
Candlewitch
2 months 3 weeks ago
Dearest Ruby,
I love how your words form perfect thoughts and plant them in my mind! To me, it seems playful, at first. A change comes over the mood as it becomes a quest. but in the end, the mission feels doomed to failure. I really love this poem! Good luck with the contest!
xxx Cat
Ruby Lord
2 months 3 weeks ago
Hi Cat, thank you for reading
Hi Cat, thank you for reading and commenting. I'm glad you found my words revealing. I wanted it to be the sort of trip we can all imagine. I hope you got my ending? I planted it to trip others up ha ha.
Hope you and Steve are well and writing lots of poems. Take care, Ruby xx
RoseBlack
2 months 2 weeks ago
Stuck in
a static vortex...spinning over and over...your poems always have an elegance about them, powerful words and vivid imagery. Always a pleasure to read.
Ruby Lord
2 months 2 weeks ago
Hi Rose, thank you for
Hi Rose, thank you for reading and commenting. And thank you for your kind and thoughtful words, It's a fascinating subject to read and write about. But I really enjoyed imagining my astronaut thoughts as he circled the earth. I think I made him to be like a person I once worked with. A self centered narcissist, that's why he comes across in that way. Ruby xx