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Colder, and a bit Older

When I was but a young man
I flew high, by the seat of my pants,
I celebrated with my glass held, high,
plus, I rarely missed a "dance"!

Then, as I grew older
seems I'd break before I'd bend;
and, as life grew much colder
I learned the value of a friend.

Now, I am much grayer
and cherish days, as they go by;
with each, and every memory
causing my heart, and soul to sigh;

I've honestly tried to help,
and treat others in a way;
to show that I'm an example
like how Jesus, used to say.

I sincerely hope I never
caused anyone to fall,
compared to my few burdens
my blessings outweigh them all!

And to our next generation
coming up into our view,
I pray your blessings too, will be greater
as I bid you all, "adieu"!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Simply an odd amount of, "quasi-futuristic reflections".

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years 1 month ago

Doc

Join the club, know how you feel lol, at least you can bend a bit lol, liked this write a delicate show of age, Yours Ian.T

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 1 month ago

Thanx, Sir Ian....

...I sincerely appreciate your words of encouragement on this one. However, some may get the idea that I'm also, "hell bent", ya know?
friend, doc.