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Dec 09, 2024
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Comfort and Joy
Now rest ye, earthly gentle beings
The Universe is wise
She looks upon us with a Love
That neither feigns nor dies
Though in our arrogance we fall
In bitter compromise
Oh, tidings of comfort and joy
Comfort and joy
She will comfort us with tidings of joy
So rest ye, mortal gentle beings
Our Earth is with us still
Though we have plundered in the dark
Her heart brings us Goodwill
And with her Never-Ending Hope
To nurture and fulfill
Oh, tidings of comfort and joy
Comfort and joy
She will consummate good tidings of joy
So shall we rest, we fallen beings
In Peace and Quietude
Delivered from our ignorance
Of each profit pursued
And be well pleased with what we have
Our thankfulness renewed
With tidings of comfort and joy
Comfort and joy
Oh, may we rest in comfort and joy
About This Poem
Last Few Words: In the spirit of the traditional carol, "God Rest Ye, Merry Gentlemen." With hope to be one with the gifts of each other, our Earth, and our extraordinary Universe.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
kowque
6 months 2 weeks ago
I'm loving
The female pronouns
They feel like an ode
You write so well, always, without fail
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Koki,
Warm regards for the Season of Love.
Thank you for reading!
L
Ruby Lord
6 months 2 weeks ago
Magnificent Lavender. This is
Magnificent Lavender. This is the first Christmas poem I've sung this year. You are so clever, love it. Ruby xxx :)
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Ruby!
So good to see you! Thank you for reading. I am always grateful for your time.
I hope you have a Warm, Wonderful Season!
Lx
Ruby Lord
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hi Lavender, I thought your
Hi Lavender, I thought your poem was wonderful and I promise you, I did sing it.
It is bloody freezing here, British winters, who needs them?
Hope you are well and not experiencing the same cold conditions as I am.
Take care and stay warm Ruby :) xxx
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hi, Ruby,
I'm trying to find, and keep, the magic of Winter, but the cold and dark it brings makes it hard. We've had about a week of bitter cold, followed by a couple days of unseasonably warmer weather. My bones predict the drastic changes. Hope to read your wonderful new work here, soon!
Take good care,
Lx
Rula
6 months 2 weeks ago
Dear Lavender
Wonderful writing as always.
Much love the opening lines and the repetitive lines, comfort and joy
Always pleasure to read you
Thank you for sharing!
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Rula,
Sometimes poetry is like comfort food. I've been hoping for it this lovely season.
Much love to you and yours,
Lx
Geezer
6 months 2 weeks ago
I like...
the rhythm of this one. it marches right along, of course, your rhyming words are right on. In the line "Though in our arrogance
we fall" I think it could use a single syllable to bring the line to full strength. " Though in our arrogance we [may] fall, or some other word to fill that space. The use of the female pronoun gives the whole thing a goddess-like quality. Nicely done!
~Geez.
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Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Geezer,
Contemplating the Universe, the Earth, and our place in it, especially during this season, and finding comfort there. I'll think over your suggestion regarding another syllable. Always grateful for your help!
Warm wishes to you and yours during this Special Season!
Lx
scribbler
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello
The mimicked rhythm is close to if not exact. I expect this was a difficult poem to write
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Stan,
This actually brought me "comfort and joy" while writing. Such a miraculous time of year in many ways. Thank you for reading!
Warm wishes to you and your family,
L