faerybeki

Feb 06, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Comfort of a Cliche in the Morning

She pretends
she's still asleep
as he rolls out of bed,
prepares to leave

Oh well

there's plenty more
fish in the sea
and you have to fuck
a lot of frogs
before you find
a Prince

About This Poem

Last Few Words: seems I'm writing a lot of short poems at the moment, a reflection of the time I have to write I guess. Be interested to know if this one works, as is, or if I need to add some more?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Comments

Kailashana2

14 years 5 months ago

Do not add a word. Do not

Do not add a word. Do not subtract a word.

I will say it: I LOVE THIS POEM, BRILLIANT!

(Onward to more frogs!) lol.

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

lol :) Thanks Anna :) just

lol :) Thanks Anna :) just what I needed, will leave it how it is! but no more frogs for me I'm a happily married woman now, much love Beki xxx

Blue_Halcyon

14 years 5 months ago

Be careful!

Some of those frogs have warts! Literally! Really though, are any of them really princes? This is a harsh peek at the sad but true reality of life.

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

Happily, not a reflection of

Happily, not a reflection of my reality, there are princes, I snagged me one lol :) but what a lot of frogs it took :) thanks for your read and your comment, much love Beki xxx

Kailashana2

14 years 5 months ago

No, unfortunately, every frog

No, unfortunately, every frog I've ever kissed was a prince with many warts.

I wouldn't mind kissing one with just one wart. I'd be a happy camper.

;-)

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

gotta love 'em warts n all ;)

gotta love 'em warts n all ;) xxx

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks Shirl, glad it gave

Thanks Shirl, glad it gave you a laugh :) much love back frog lover xxx

Kailashana2

14 years 5 months ago

Now, even the title is

Now, even the title is PERFECT!

Cheerios and hip hip hurrah!

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

Oh dear Anna, love it,

Oh dear Anna, love it, brilliant and perfect, what would the elf say? ;)) xxx ps haven't changed the title? xxx

Roscoe Lane

14 years 5 months ago

Must you,

Must you girls be so rude to us chaps, though i may look like a frog, i have always attended my duties in a princely manner. And warts i would not know what you speak of. Seriously a good funny write, leave it as it is. Regards Roscoe...

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

:) lol Hi Roscoe, will leave

:) lol Hi Roscoe, will leave it as it stands for sure, never expected such positive reaction :) I never gave up believing there were 'princes' snagged me a good'un last year, he proved I was right to never stop believing :) much love Beki xxx

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

Wartever...

Very nice. Perfectly describes the morning after the one-night-stand.
As Anna has said, succinctly put and says exactly what it wants to and no more.
Thank you, I enjoyed the read.

Psyve

P.S. : For some reason whenever Ithink of the Frog and the Princess story, I remember Mad Magazine's Don Martin's version...where the Princess leans over, smooches the frog *SMOOOOOOCH!!* and *PAFF!* turns into a frog herself....

..wartever....

...twisted fairy tales....

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

Hi Psyve, glad you enjoyed

Hi Psyve, glad you enjoyed the poem and it was successful in capturing that morning after the night before feeling, tis somewhere i found myself a lot during my 20s, happily married woman now though :) I like your ps :) have you ever seen Shrek? much love Beki xxx

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

Shrek?

Saw all three installments. The first two with the kids...the last with my wife... as we are now empty nesters.
Loved all three but particularly enjoyed the first.
Psyve

faerybeki

14 years 5 months ago

Yeah the first is brilliant,

Yeah the first is brilliant, great twist :) there's a fourth, Shrek forever after, shrek with a It's a Wonderful Life kinda feel. We've watched them all, loads, my 3 year old is a HUGE fan, more love Beki xxx