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Jul 18, 2012
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THE CONFESSIONS OF A SPIDER-updated
THE CONFESSIONS OF A SPIDER
I confess
The moment wasn’t my best
I sat down beside her
for I did lust for her curves
and waves.
as I made my way
to lay
my head upn her breats
suddenly a hand sent me
into a spin
and I could sin
no more
It's not easy being a spider
in love.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
12 years 10 months ago
I like this especially the
I like this especially the ending, one or two suggestions and one correction. Try ( my head upon her breast ) and ( a hand suddenly landed me at heavens door) . Hope i've helped a little Regards Roscoe..
Geremia
12 years 10 months ago
Dear Roscoe and Ian
Thanks. And I will make suggested changes :)
joe
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Joe
Little Miss Muppet came by to say thank goodness to whoever killed that Arachnida creature as it was frightening La La Loved it..
Could we have an "S" in her "breat" then it will be more yummy lol
Take care young man, Yours Ian.T