Contentedness

A lofty state
Soaring
Drifting
Floating
Reaching for the skies
Let it be

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This describes the beginning of my day, initialised by deep breathing, then moving to yoga nidra. Great way to start the day.

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: VIC

Favorite Poets: Dorothea McKellar, Henry Lawson, Banjo Paterson

Comments

neopoet

5 months 1 week ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Contentedness" captures a sense of freedom and tranquility through its imagery of soaring, drifting, and reaching for the skies. The repetition of short, impactful lines creates a dreamy and ethereal atmosphere that effectively conveys the theme of contentedness. However, the poem could benefit from further development to provide more depth and complexity to the emotions and ideas being explored. Consider expanding on the imagery or introducing additional layers of meaning to enhance the overall impact of the poem.

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