Neopoem Of The Week Contest August 7th to August 13th

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I talked to my cousin today
Mostly about heroin
And the miles between us

I still have yet to meet his daughter
I know she will see us someday
Like brothers

Living poetry and singing lyrics
As if we were free
As if we were happy

As if we could love as open and often as these bottles we shared

And I cried today
Like a bullet leaving a gun

Waiting to land

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

2 years 10 months ago

I resonated with these lines:

And I cried today
Like a bullet leaving a gun

Waiting to land

*always, Cat

2 years 10 months ago

I am glad you resonated with them also! Thank you :)

2 years 10 months ago

i'm enjoying your poem, and the use of white space to spotlight meaning.

2 years 10 months ago

incredible
maybe drugged poetry