Cool Breeze

Sometimes, it seemed she burned
bridges for warmth. Sometimes
while I was still crossing them.

I learned to look forward
to the cool breezes of being gone.

I wasn't bitter though. She needed to be free
to understand the properties of fire.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Geezer

10 months 1 week ago

Yes...

There are those that cannot wait for the traffic to clear, before burning the bridge that they have already crossed.
The title is good and represents the theme, which I can appreciate. The message was sent immediately and was made clear while getting to the end. My one criticism is that you could have used another word instead of [sometimes], in the second line.
Perhaps, [often]? Brevity with clarity, nice job. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

10 months ago

Thanks Geez! I like your

Thanks Geez! I like your suggestion about using "often". Always appreciate your comments!

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Lavender

10 months 1 week ago

Cool Breeze

Hello, Michael,
A unique and healthy way to look back on what could have been a harsh memory. Your last stanza is so powerful - I felt no bitterness at all, but a peaceful closure.
Thank you!
L

Michael Anthony

10 months ago

Thank youL! Well, there was

Thank youL! Well, there was probably a touch of bitterness, but it passed as I processed wjhat it all meant. Glad you liked this one!

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Leslie

10 months 1 week ago

cool breezes

I understand the concept of burning bridges, I'm on the fiery side.Im amazed that you remaied unscathed. I wish my kids could say the same,but it will take some time. I thought that this we beautiful.

Michael Anthony

10 months ago

Thank you Leslie! As I

Thank you Leslie! As I mentioned to Lavender, it took a bit of time to become unscathed by it all. I did get there though, and it's been a better place, to be sure. Appreciate your comments.

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