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Coroner
The liver, lungs, the heart, and spleen,
I whip them out and wash them clean.
A tidy stack, all neat and bright,
though none will thank me on this night.
Their ribs fall wide without a fight,
as if they’d known I always might.
No polished corpse regains its light.
The dead are nothing but polite.
I sew them down and fill with stuffing,
I love my job, I’d do it for nothing.
I like to call this craft my wealth,
but I cannot restore their health.
The work is neat, no room for faking.
A puppet show, each stitch unmaking.
The grin remains, but I know well,
these lips I shape will never tell.
And now the powder and the lace,
a final touch to stiffened face.
The lips so sweet, are cherry red,
look closer still, they don’t seem dead.
The masterpiece I’ve put in place
a disguise faked for human grace.
Another thought, another thread,
another judge, another dead.
And still, the powder and the lace,
a final joke, death in its place.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I can't say this poem was inspired by anything in particular. The first line popped into my head while I was watching a film and it kind of came together as this. Recently I've been watching Vikings, so expect a lot of poems about Norse men and their mythology. They are great subjects to write about especially if you know a little bit about their gods.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
4 months 1 week ago
I really like...
this one. As you might have guessed by some of my works, I love the macabre and unusual. Not many people think, [or maybe want to think] about things having to do with what happens to your remains after you are dead. You have written a picture of a last intimate interaction between two people. Not even the family gets to share this moment. I would change the word [pile] in the second line to wash. Well done. ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord
4 months 1 week ago
Thank you Geezer for reading,
Thank you Geezer for reading, commenting and suggesting an alternative word which works much better. I think you really connected with this which is always fantastic to read. I like writing macabre poems, they give me more space to explore and a lot of opportunities to pull the reader in. Great comments, really appreciate the thought you put into this. Ruby xx