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Apr 13, 2011
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The Corrupted Evolution
I don't believe in a soul,
If I had one,
it's been carted away from legacy.
Be amidst one child devil,
of propensity undiscovered,
a gutless trilobite.
Swimming ostensibly,
existing recognisably,
hidden.
Begrudgingly filing a request for reward,
rewardingly,
soulless may create my non existence.
In bloodless comfort,
existence does not gratify a soul,
why live it.
Then is death.
That death brings life.
To a soulless trilobite.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Bloke
the question is are you asking or do you know.
for me it's yes
"with out the dark we could not call the light day."
Eddie C,
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
hi eduardo
Elaborate on are you asking or do you know?
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Bloke
yes means that I don't believe in this whole soul thing, the bible says, "the soul is the body and the spirit is what return to God", it's kind of hard to believe, So I'll just live this one, and let God worry about the rest, Hahaha!
Tomorrow i'll be struck by lighting. LMAO
I love dark poetry, that was all I use to write up to a year ago, then I fell in love and light came into my mind, Ahh shit to much information. Hahaha!
sorry, I liked this write a lot It expresses how I feel about it.
there's your Elaboration,
thanks For the Great post
Eddie C.
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
One hell
of an elaboration if i believed in such a thing. Thanks mate. I also fell in love about 18 months ago and now I don't just write dark poetry, I will share such a poem one day. Too much info?
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Bloke
Eddie is good Eduardo is to formal.
Eddie C.
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
Well
Well hello there Eddie. Bloke.
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
hello
Back to you!
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
ok this 'man love' is
ok this 'man love' is becoming too much! lmao...
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Chez
I like you very funny stuff.
good sense of humor, your cool in my book < if I had a book.
Oh yeah i do have a book, guess what your not in it, to much of a re-write> Hahaha!
EC
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
If..
I was in your book Eddie I'd be War and Peace lol...*wink
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
OOOh!
bi-polar, now I'm scared.
Hahaha!
Eddie C
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
lol on the contrary just long
lol on the contrary just long and complex :P
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Chez
I got it, just having fun with your choice of words, buddy.
I am glad that you have a good sense of humor, wait didn't I say that already.
Here it comes alzheimer. Bullocks.
Eddie C.
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
lol Eddie
It's been a delight so far, the poetry, the poets and the fun, enjoying myself here
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Good!!
Here I am working really hard, while your out having fun. Hahaha!
"Fast Eddie Esq."
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
Can't stop laughing
I'm glad you both have a sense of humour, wish I could have been part of such a turbulent conversation, yeah i'm still laughing.
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
One might say...
do we corrupt only the body and leave the soul for god? For me I think we should use the body and forget the soul as soon as it leaves us, it's not ours. This is dark but the images and the feelings I get when reading this are quite haunting, I don't write quite this dark but I enjoy someone who does it well.
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
CC
Your response is what I am hoping a reader of this poem might ponder, thank you. That being said, I do not necessarily believe in the existence of a soul from a religious point of view, my views are elsewhere. Yet I do not deny the possibility.
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
No problems
Considering my views on ordered religion which I think is contemptible lol I prefer the work of the philosophers and their different points of view. Have just finished reading The Antichrist by Nietzsche which I found fascinating.
bloke
14 years 3 months ago
Considering
I can only thank you more for your response. Thank you
weirdelf
14 years 3 months ago
Worth the read.
Raises a lot of the questions that confirm my atheism. Especially the truly horrid concept of a disembodied soul. Unable to act, interact, affect anything, the very idea is the product of a twisted masochistic mind.
"A casual stroll through the lunatic asylum shows that faith does not prove anything." -Friedrich Nietzsche
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
One wonders
should we just enjoy life an not worry about an ending?
weirdelf
14 years 3 months ago
seems like a sound approach to me.
or rather, after the ending.
bloke
14 years 2 months ago
elf
An enlightening quote there. I must ponder, what are your thoughts on hitchens?
weirdelf
14 years 2 months ago
Out of the three major atheist thinkers
A.C. Grayling, Christopher Hitchens and Richard Dawkins... I love em all.
I strain at the yoke of religious tolerance because I think all faith, not just religion but faith, is bloody silly.
Can't wait to get my hands on a copy of A.C. Grayling "The Good Book"
weirdelf
14 years 2 months ago
check this out
http://richarddawkins.net/audio/861-we-39-d-be-better-off-without-relig…