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Tigger Kaz
Tigger Kaz
Aug 12, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Count and Share your Blessings

The pace of life seems crazy,
In who it leaves behind.
Yet the greed of the wealthy,
Means too many do not mind.

A cavernous void, for the supposed lazy,
With few hands to lift them out.
When alright jacks have plenty,
Caring little for those with nought.

Empathy lacking, apethetic souls,
Blinded by selfish greed,
Have lost the ability,
To share with those in need

Narratives of competition,
Knocked their kindness away.
Changed their life's direction,
And led them all astray

Be not like these unkindly people,
Proffer a hand to help the poor.
For tomorrow is not yet come,
And you don't know what's in store.

Life changes on a hairpin,
your luck could turn around.
Fame and fortune today,
Tomorrow could run you aground.

Feel grateful for your blessings,
Leave jealousy at the door,
Share good fortune with each other,
And stop perpetually wanting more.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Coventry, England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Michael Rosen , Rudyard Kipling , Pam Ayres , Benjamin Zephaniah

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

10 months 2 weeks ago

I really enjoyed...

hearing the British accent as I read this.
[The words you choose]. I thought that you wrote some very true lines,

"Empathy lacking, apethetic souls,
Blinded by selfish greed,
Have lost the ability,
To share with those in need"

It seems that the richer some get, the less they think about the poor.
Very nice job, ~ Geez.
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Rula

Rula

10 months 1 week ago

Words of wisdom

Well said!
Many great lines. Much appreciate it
Thank you for sharing

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

10 months 1 week ago

Hello Tigger,

I much enjoyed your poem! have not seen much of you lately. What have you been up to?

*hugs, Cat

Tigger Kaz

Tigger Kaz

10 months 1 week ago

Glad you liked it

Thanks for your feedback.
I have been attempting to keep my daughter amused on her 6 weeks school break.
2 more weeks left to go, and counting lol.

Leslie

Leslie

8 months 1 week ago

Tigger Kaz

So true, this poem. I don't know if I have the beautiful hope which you possess. I felt so strongly about the very last line among so many others, great poetry. By the way I am 3/4 Irish by decent. How old is your daughter. I have two of my own and six grand daughters. One of my grand daughters is named Ireland Rose.

Clentin

Clentin

8 months 1 week ago

I read the poem several more

I read the poem several more times. I find the nasty elements of a lot of
People todaywho foster greed, apathy, lack pf any understanding of those in need.

Good poem, keep writing.