Counting Stars

Walk beside my tranquil longing
Lead me headlong into bliss
Cloak despair with secret smiles
Quantify me with your kiss

Wanting hands trace supple form
As witnessed by a twinkling sky
A countless audience of lights
Ever watching you and I

We court forever’s influence
Inviting her to mentor us
It’s patience that she tutors
‘Til every dagger turns to rust

Count the stars with me this night
From now until the end of time
Perchance the clouds obscure their view
Above the veil we’ll have to climb

About This Poem

Last Few Words: For my Valentine.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

Comments

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

This whole thing

gave me goosebumps. My favorite stanza:

We court forever’s influence
Inviting her to mentor us
It’s patience that she tutors
‘Til every dagger turns to rust

Shivers....well done!

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

Smiles

I love that one too. Thanks for reading.

Tim

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Tim

Sigh

To have a love like this is truly inspiring, Your poem is a song of love sung with a gravely voice that catches the breath and steals the hearts of those who live without love.

Bellissimo

Hugs Jayne xox