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Cow

Cow

There is a cow up ahead on the road carrying a heavy load

Please give her a hand; she is trying to reach the promised land

She wants to take her milk to the honey, where it is always sunny

She cannot do it by herself, and you are the only one left

To help carry her load on down that long, long road

If her load you will help bear when you finally get there

They will let you come inside; you will not be denied

About This Poem

Last Few Words: These words just came to me

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Southwest United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Jim Morrison, Sylvia Plath

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

My only...

criticism here, is that cows are usually the female definitive of an animal, yet you refer to it as being a male. If it is male, it does not give milk. If indeed, it is a female cow, you should change the language to read as [her]. ~Geezer.
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Obadiah Grey

Obadiah Grey

2 years 10 months ago

If you're milking a male cow

If you're milking a male cow
I'd hazard a guess it has a big grin
and a far away look in his eye.

Easily fixable mistake, the sentiment behind your piece is laudable
and worth the effort!

Obi.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 10 months ago

I interpreted the Cow

to represent our fellow human. If we see someone carrying a heavy load (physical or emotional), stop and lend a hand. We never know what someone else is going through and a shoulder to lean on or a set of helping hands may be much needed and appreciated. Good write.

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S

scribbler

2 years 10 months ago

Hi

I agree with Rose plus I liked the internal rhyme