Creep

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively uses vivid imagery and metaphor to convey the discomfort and violation felt by the subject. The comparison of the unwanted attention to an "oil slick" and a "toxic slug's trail" is particularly powerful, as these images evoke a sense of something slimy, difficult to remove, and potentially harmful.

The poem also effectively poses a rhetorical question towards the end, asking the perpetrator how they would feel if the roles were reversed. This serves to highlight the hypocrisy and lack of empathy in the perpetrator's actions.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme. The current structure of the poem feels somewhat disjointed, which can distract from the overall message. Additionally, the use of the term "creep" in the last line feels somewhat abrupt and could potentially be integrated more smoothly into the poem.

The poem could also benefit from further exploration of the emotions and reactions of the subject. While the discomfort and violation are clearly conveyed, the poem could delve deeper into the psychological impact of the unwanted attention. This could add an additional layer of depth and complexity to the poem.

Lastly, the poem could potentially explore the societal and cultural factors that contribute to the behavior of the perpetrator. This could provide a broader context for the poem and further enhance its impact.

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I felt the taint of their fingers, smelled the halitosis
and remember the clammy feel of sweat.
It is not easy to endure the attention of anyone that we do not like
or even someone we do not know. What is wrong with people that do that?

You expressed your disgust in a manner that leaves no room for debate.
Your language use is great, and it makes the reader feel. ~ Geezer.
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