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Jul 07, 2023
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Crescendo
I will tell you how
I thought of you today -
as if a thousand wild horses
approached from an unknown distance
storming their way closer,
thrusting onward and into my mind.
I closed my eyes,
the ground trembled at my feet,
and there was your earthen
essence, settling on my waiting lips.
The universe exploded,
I completely let go,
suddenly,
as if I'd never
exhale again.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ruby Lord
2 years ago
Wow, sorry I missed this one.
Wow, sorry I missed this one. I wish I'd seen it sooner.
I loved the imagery you used to create the trembling feeling in my body you wrote about. It was very well done, bringing together elements of love with nature. Excellent Ruby :) xx
Lavender
2 years ago
Hello, Ruby!
I'm glad you enjoyed this. I remember feeling this way when my late husband and I started dating - the thought that someone could have this effect on another.
Thank you for reading!
Lx
leoferaco
1 year 11 months ago
lovely
every time I read your work I'm moved, I really hope you become a published writer one day. You have the talent and more should discover it.
Lavender
1 year 11 months ago
Hello, Leo,
You are incredibly kind. Sometimes certain poems just write themselves. I appreciate you reading and commenting so generously!
L
RoseBlack
1 year 11 months ago
Hi L
Another touching poem! Some of the best thoughts I have had of someone I love have felt so real. Your poems are always so deep, no matter how long or short they are. Always a pleasure to read! Well done!
Lavender
1 year 11 months ago
Hello, Carrie,
I find it amazing that thoughts of another can be so deep and life changing.
Thank you for reading. You are always positive and supportive!
L