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Apr 05, 2025
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Crossing the Bridge
Today
I spent time
with two of my favourite people,
my daughters.
It was a day
of togetherness
and self care
at a day spa,
followed by
a meal at a local pub.
On my return home,
I received a message
which reminded me
that I have crossed the bridge
between my past life
and my present life.
It consisted
of a photo
of a bulldozer
in my previous residence
removing what was left
of my separate study
in the back yard.
This was followed by
Faye's photo
of the demolished garage
and the demolished study.
Jodie and Kiran,
my former neighbours,
highlighted
the changes I have made
in my life.
That photo,
now residing on a USB,
represented it
in one visual presentation.
People talk about burning bridges.
Not my style.
I cross them
and move on
to the next stage
of my life.
I've made those changes
and embraced them fully.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: With all my thanks to Jodie and Kiran, I received a photograph on my SMS . It was a bulldozer in what used to be my back yard for what was forty-one years of my married life. It was a reminder to me of how much my life has changed. I am now a downsizer, officially, having moved into an apartment.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Crossing the Bridge" effectively captures a significant moment of transition and reflection in the speaker's life. The imagery of spending time with loved ones, visiting a day spa, and receiving a message about physical changes to their previous residence creates a clear narrative arc. The theme of moving from the past to the present is well-developed through the metaphor of crossing bridges and embracing change.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider incorporating more sensory details to enhance the reader's immersion in the speaker's experience. Descriptions of sights, sounds, smells, or tactile sensations from the day spa or local pub could enrich the poem and make the scenes more vivid.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from further exploration of the emotional impact of these transitions. How does the speaker feel about leaving behind their past life and embracing the changes in their present life? Including more introspective moments or reflections on personal growth could add depth to the poem's themes.
Overall, "Crossing the Bridge" effectively conveys a
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Candlewitch
3 months 1 week ago
hello T G,
It is very nice that you had such an excellent day with your girls. Are congratulations in order on the downsized abode? I hope your new apartment is as cozy as a well-fitting glove and may you know only good times and joy, there. It sounds like you have had a well-rounded life in your old home. I enjoyed reading this morsel of your experiences. Thank you for posting this.
hugs, Cat
p.s.
Is there something I can address you as besides "T G" a pet name or something?
The Gogetter
3 months 1 week ago
Reply to Candlewitch
I like the way you describe my apartment. It is a well fitting glove for me. I enjoy being here. I had a very full life in my old house. My neighbours were and are fabulous people. It was so thoughtful of Jodie and Kiran to send me the photo. Now daughter number two is watching the progress of the bulldoze. We all knew that it would happen. What is more, we , once the house was sold , were ready for everything new , a new chapter, even my daughters. However, they still have a curiosity to see what will follow after our presence in the zone. I don't. I no longer belongs to me. By the way Candlewitch ( Cat), TG sounds just great to me. It will do. Appreciate your response to my small poem about my very busy, pleasant day and the not so coincidental photo of the bulldozing of my past.