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Feb 04, 2023
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Cry A Little
Cry a little and you will see,
all those tears will set you free.
So cry those tears and let them
flow and know you'll never
be alone.
You can cry alone
or cry with me and
be with you, I'll forever be.
So take my hand and I'll
walk with you and we
will cry together just
me and you.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Cry A Little
Hello, Heather,
Tender message, and so true. This is listed as free verse, but seems to have a bit of a loose rhyme. The last line of the second stanza has the word "be" twice. It jars the rhythm a bit, and I'm not certain the ending "be" is necessary unless it is fitting in with your rhyme.
Thank you,
L
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
I cry often
I’m frequently crying. It’s reclaiming. I wear the tears like a badge of honor. Strong enough to process the most difficult feelings.
Good for you
Tim
Geezer
2 years 5 months ago
You have...
just a minor glitch, I think that the line could be fixed simply.
[and with you, I'll forever be]. Nice sentiment, too bad that most people feel that crying
is a sign of weakness. Good job. ~ Geezer.
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