Cupiditas Mundi xxvii

Dialogue between us
Is hard but not impossible

I will send my messenger
On dark wings

To consummate what is most
Beautiful

About This Poem

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About the Author

Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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neopoet

5 months 1 week ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "Cupiditas Mundi xxvii" conveys a sense of mystery and longing through the imagery of a messenger with dark wings. The brevity of the poem adds to its enigmatic quality, leaving the reader intrigued by the implied depth of emotion and connection between the speakers. However, the poem could benefit from further development in terms of providing more context or detail to enhance the reader's understanding of the relationship or situation being described. Expanding on the themes of communication and beauty could help to enrich the overall impact of the poem.

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