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gregwa8
gregwa8
Sep 05, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Cure of Nature

the sound of my
anxious thoughts
like an anchor
pulled up over the gunwale

compete with
the sounds of
nature

the waves
gently
lapping the side
of my boat

one is as heavy
and severe
as a stone
dropped in dark water

descending towards
a silty bottom

the other as buoyant
as a bubble

ascending towards
the light

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

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Comments

Rula

Rula

6 years 10 months ago

Wonderful!

I like the title and the simile works well to show the impact of the anxious thoughts and how could nature gently cure.

I would merge the first two short stanzas in one.
Thank you for sharing.
Peace!

R

raj

6 years 10 months ago

Hello Greg

this poem is very genteel in nature and liked the way you compared thoughts with ripples...and mind with boat..
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