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judyanne
judyanne
Jun 06, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

curtain call

the theatre dual
company of mind in body
presents

between origin of
cradle
grave

act one
to experience

heart, art
and fair play
work excellence
love

lust
war, destruction
injustice, hunger
hate, fear

and faith
or lack thereof

free
will
be
no charge

note

critical analysis has been varied
dependent on seating position
.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

13 years 1 month ago

This made me laugh judyanne

"note

critical analysis has been varied
dependent on seating position"

This made me laugh judyanne, you have covered all
in this tumble of life down the page of our minds,
a new form for you I think, as it was for me.
Not easy to know how much to leave out
and how much to keep is it?

Yes life is indeed a stage as the Bard said.
So exciting and frightening at times, calm at others.

And yours is free:-
"free
will
be
no charge"

Smile and H from annanya

Rula

Rula

13 years 1 month ago

I though

it is an intriguing title .
No critic in fact but curious to know why you've made those breaks. I always thought we need them to make it easier to read which you don't really need here especially

act one
to experience

heart, art
and fair play
work excellence
love

lust
war, destruction
injustice, hunger
hate, fear

unless i am missing something . I do really like to learn..

judyanne

judyanne

13 years 1 month ago

hi rula

it is more than just ‘making it easier to read’
to my understanding
one of the purposes of the line breaks and stanzas of fee verse is to separate the thoughts of the theme, to make the reader pause and take in the thought before moving to the next

so i broke the lines and the stanzas to try to have the reader pause at them

and also to try to have it sound as an advertiser would call customers to the show ...

thanks very much for rhe read and comment
love judy
xxx

believe

believe

13 years 1 month ago

Detailed analogy

I like the way this is detailed and precise,
ALL the makings for a life in Life or on stage

I Like

judyanne

judyanne

13 years 1 month ago

hi believe

thank you very much for the very kind comment
love judy
xxx

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

when you said act one

I scanned down in haste
to read act two
sad there was none
perhaps some day
you may

but how glad i am
you keep many hearts at bay
a Piscean trait
so to say

judyanne

judyanne

13 years ago

thanks loved

lol - act 2 is for another poem xx

thanks for the great comments
love judy
xxx

Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years 1 month ago

Judy

The seven ages of man, scattered to the four winds and reassembled with fewer words.
There's Loved waiting for the "second act" we best keep that as a surprise for later lol.
Grand fractured write, where are you in this act, Yours Ian.T

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 1 month ago

Dear Judy,

I loved this! A little bit different style for you, but it has your finger prints all over it! The title is appropriate. Thanks for the big smile you gave me! I cannot choose favorite lines as they are inseperable!

love, Cat (& eddy)

p.s.

still sick :( am I

loved

loved

13 years ago

message for Judy and Cat

Please do comment on my challenge poem

The seed..

it has no ''I ''///''ME'' element
many advised on my poem
CRITIQUE
U MISSED it

judyanne

judyanne

13 years ago

now loved

that's naughy
i will try to get to your write, but you shouldn't solicit us :)
love judy
xxx

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years ago

Hello Judyanne,

I just came by to see your wonderful writings. I notice you haven't posted in awhile. I hope you are well. I am slowly getting over my illness.

love, Cat (& eddy)

judyanne

judyanne

13 years ago

dearest cat (and eddy)

thank you for the lovely comments and for caring where and how i am -
i am ok - not sick, just been very busy...
back now, with heaps to catch up on lol

love judy
xxx