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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Jul 29, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cut Flowers

She had broken pieces when we met.
Some of the shards piercing her still,
revealing a disquiet of scars.
Love, the brigand that put them there.

When I gave her cut flowers
she had no chance of seeing
the field of understanding and tenderness
from which they came.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Revisiting this piece. Sometimes our pasts keep us from seeing a future.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Geezer

Geezer

1 year 11 months ago

Absolutely stunning...

I wouldn't change or add a thing! I did think of eliminating the comma, which to my way of thinking, would change the whole context of the piece. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

1 year 11 months ago

Cut Flowers

Hello, Michael,
Your title is both tender and raw, as is the entire poem. So well written.
L