The Cycle

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This poem, it starts out good, but loses me as to intent,
someone on their knees, then there are monsters under
the ocean (serpents perhaps), then they are you?
Didn't get the end at all, what have I missed?

Richard

‘I'm on my knees
Begging anyone please’ =a little cliché, and well known words of a song

I would simply make it
‘I'm on my knees
Begging’
and I would also drop the last line
just me I stress

a couple of typos
‘Beaneath the sea's calm façade’ (beneath)
‘The twisted mishappen shapes’ (misshapen)

otherwise I think this is a really good write
I catch the emotion – great word usage with such as
‘Beneath the sea's calm facade’
‘twisted misshapen ‘
‘seeking revenge’
‘Prey and game’

- depicts the inner demons well
love judy
xxx

A write about the hidden demons most people hide under sometimes just a smile, but some demons are bad if let loose.
Many people hide anger and depression that sometimes boils over seeking new things to battle with, I hopr that the ones you hide are not that bad.
The write is good on the whole just as Judy said watch out for those Cliche things, trouble with those things they are everywhere and hard to avoid, just have a read and if it sounds familiar then change the words around as Judy has done, Yours Ian.T