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D R I Z Z L E

binary sequential
this glide of seconds
in a slow blink

chorus
of shadows
behind the screen

the dark satin worlds
thoughtlands
bending like a head wind
in dune grasses
and naked dark seas
dancing with the froth of
clouds misted
and cool

perforations
of light
penetrating
soft as a touch

tender remonstrances
stipple
edged

dancing in the sprinkler
puddles
an upside down day
bejewelled
like a fallen crown

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Rula

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

Steve

Your lines strike especially that last stanza, the last three lines

"an upside down day
 bejewelled
 like a fallen crown"

Would I ever be able to suggest anything to improve? I doubt. 

Esker

Esker

11 years 10 months ago

through the day submerged in thought

the light on all sharp brilliance
the dark in its velvet deep

moving on the wheels
finding hard corners to wheel
the inertia load
crazy strong and pulling
like a storm wind

bending linear arrivals
to forgotten destinations....

Thank You for understanding
the poem...
on this difficult Friday
it means a lot!