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Jun 10, 2016
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Da Forrest
ITS THE BEAST
TAKE ON THE LEASH
UNDER THE MOON
WE SUPPOSE SOON
ALL DOGS WILL LIE
UNDERNEATH DA MOON
DOGS WILL LIE
I SUPPOSE INSIDE
DO YOU EVEN CARE
WHERE IS THE INSIDE
IN A CAVE
WE ALL BEHAVE
I SUPPOSE WE ALL GO
TO GOD IN THE END
PEACE
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
jane210660
9 years 4 months ago
Hi There
Just curious as to why you have written in upper case? To me it seems shouty and harder to read, but that is just my opinion.
Looking forward to hearing from you. Jx
lovedly
9 years 4 months ago
yes please edit before
the owner like poet comes
with a tonne of bricks
edit
switch to small ones
you are from Texas
also all first alpha's
need not be caps
Hurry quick
ere some one kicks
your maiden poetry is this
weirdelf
9 years 4 months ago
Jane and Loved are right
I won't even read it any more than I will listen to someone shouting at me.
Do you know how to edit a poem here? You are new to Neopoet.
Just above the title you will see 3 tabs 'View', 'Edit' and 'Unpublish'. Click on edit and you can manually make changes.
A handy hint. If you use Microsoft Word, and this works in most other word processors, just select the text and press 'Shift' and 'F3', it will switch from all caps, to first letter caps or to un-capped.
China Blue
9 years 4 months ago
upper case
It has already been stated that upper case is difficult to read and hard on the eyes
Jess has given accurate instructions please use them
context wise it sounds like it might work for rapping but the use of DA improper english however I have tried to find the beat in this and could not