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judyanne
judyanne
May 09, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Meter... The Workshop.

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Dactyl (meter workshop)

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Travel through time with me now and remember the hopes and the fantasies
Think on the dreams we had then, in those days when the world was so young.
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About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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judyanne

judyanne

8 years 1 month ago

Thank you Mark

for your input
I have trouble understanding why you think the meter of the second verse is out
I can only say that it must be due to accent....

I really appreciate your thoughts, any crit will make me check the work.... but in this case I still think my verse is dactyl

Your verse is fine, but it changes what I am saying
Thanks again for your comment, it is appreciated
Love judy
xxx

judyanne

judyanne

8 years 1 month ago

Lol

You sound like me re your sleep pattern....
Thanks for the return visit
Love judy
xxx