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lovedly
lovedly
Apr 05, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Daddy don't cry for me......An emotional audition

I just saw an audition
the girl had to sing a song
for her 'dying' dad
who was
present in the audience
along with her mom

even the four judges cried
a poet must have the vibes
of being calm and silent
but the audience
should shed tears

weep loud enough
for the softest ears

then sing a chorus
what ever will be
will be
what ever will be
oh daddy don't cry

she won the emotion
now you try singing one

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 3 months ago

What can I say...

It's a tear-jerker! Get your hand-kerchief out my boy! Only crit. is to get rid of the [also]. Best line? [ weep loud enough for the softest ears.] ~ Geez.
.

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 3 months ago

tissue

Gee is handy
glad you used em
others may
removed also

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 3 months ago

Emotional as well as a

Emotional as well as a joyfull read. I have no tissue handy, so tears are running down my cheeks...lol.
Seriously, another good poem from you, as usual.
All the best, Gracy

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 3 months ago

you ae wonderful Gracy ma'am

you help me maintain my stance
while many come and simply glance
take a fleeting chance

damn from lovedly
no romance
a poem in advance

emilya'spoetry

emilya'spoetry

4 years 3 months ago

lovedly

You got ME right in the heart. For a second, I thought you were referencing that girl on American Idol that sang about her dad with him watching, and it was a very emotional moment for all involved, but when I saw "dying" dad, I knew it wasn't (I wanna say he had just recovered from alcoholism). What show was this?

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 3 months ago

yes

same show I saw on tv recently
I changed the title
Someone liked this
but later mentioned
the guy really died .
So i couldn't then cry
She was naturally emotional
she won

so she cried
the audience also
I hope you liked it
what an irony maybe

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 3 months ago

EP

THANKS A LOT
Rgds

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 3 months ago

hello,

I've read this poem twice, the first time I read it I didn't have the time to respond. very poignant. It reminded me of my Dad...he died when I was eighteen...I took it very hard. as usual you strike a chord with your fine poetry. thank you for this.

*hugs, Cat

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 3 months ago

hello cw thanks

your fine poetry.
and yes
your remarks equally
mine died when i was 29 or so
thank you