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Jun 03, 2013
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the dance of death
I have been watching
as the tendrils of life
drift off and away
casting shadows
on her soul
in a waning light
I felt the touch of faith
nails indented my knees
and palms, now laying down
I feel my heart shift
into a peaceful stillness
slowly it started
sliding in a sepia light
I now held her hand
tracing the infinity symbol
into her palm
now we silently wait
as death dances in the shadows
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
12 years 1 month ago
Dear Jayne
This is touching though I don't figure every image yet I feel sadness through out. Is everything alright at your end. Is this about someone sick or dying and special for you?
Seren
12 years ago
Dear Rula
First off sorry for the delay in answering, We did have two deaths in our family and its part of the reason I havent been around much, I am still working on this one thanks for the read and your thoughts
sincerely Jayne- Chloe
Shyanne18
12 years 1 month ago
LOVE IT
I think you may have written a new favorite of mine! Keep writing!
Seren
12 years ago
Smile
thank you so much I am very happy you enjoyed it, sorry for the delay answering your message
sincerely Jayne-Chloe