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Dandy Lion
The mountain lion looked around
in search of some kind of treat,
he knew not, from where it’d come
he just had to have some meat.
It seemed he’d searched for quite some time
hunger starting up a trauma,
when finally his eyes did find
a healthy piece of brahma.
He caught his meat-and he did eat
‘twas even better than a deli,
he ate up almost all his prize
and severely gorged his belly.
Proud of himself, and of his catch
he laid down on the canyon floor,
his contentedness he could not contain
so the lion began to roar.
A hunter happened to hear the noise
and a shot came from a finger pull,
and the morale of this story's got to be,
“Keep quiet, when you’re full of bull !”
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I know....it's apretty bad "pun".
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 11 months ago
Doc
Well done a good turn to laughter at the end, this we expect and no disappointment here, Yours Ian.T
docmaverick
12 years 11 months ago
Thanx Ian....
...am glad you got a chuckle!
doc.
Rula
12 years 11 months ago
A good moral
Indeed and not without a smile.Just what I needed to end my tiring day:-)
Thanks doc.
docmaverick
12 years 11 months ago
Quite welcome!
doc
Candlewitch
12 years 11 months ago
hello Doc,
a senic tale which flows along smoothly, ending in a good moral! I got a good laugh at the end. Thanks for the laughter! A great gift of story telling!
always, Cat
docmaverick
12 years 11 months ago
Hey Cat...
...I really am happy that this one caught your eye. Been going through it, of late. I had 2 separate surgeries on my left eye. The first one didn't re-attatch my torn retina, soo....it was off to L.A. for some open eyeball surgery where I'm hoping they got it right.
The Doctor told me yesterday that, my sight will return to me in about 3 more weeks. Sheeesh!
Truly happy this brought a smile,
doc.