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Nov 15, 2024
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In The Dark Night!
In the dark night
shadows move swiftly.
Carrying burdens
greivous to be born.
Brandishing pitchforks
lanterns and axes.
Off on a witch hunt
to settle an incident.
Innocent victims
abused for their differences.
Knowing not why they'd been
driven from their homes.
On with the tyranny
there by the waters edge!
Silenced in terror
at the first light of dawn
Deprived and destitute
there in the morning.
Hung by the neck
to end the alarm.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I read up on this and found that at least 200 individuals were hung by the neck until dead. One man was pressed beneath stones until he died. Most of the victims were women, but one young girl Dorothy Good only four years old was also accused and imprisoned for eight months. All of these senseless, unfeeling atrocities happened because of unfounded fear and intolerance. None of this needed to take place at all.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
7 months 1 week ago
Dearest John,
This a part of our history that is shameful and reprehensible. You covered it well, but the church had much to do with the burnings and hangings. If your neighbor did not like you, he might give your name to the witch hunters and bear false witness against you. Those were terrible times and we have much to be ashamed of. Excellent poem, my friend! Cat xxx
Leslie
7 months 1 week ago
In The Dark Night!
I WROTE THIS POEM FOR YOU. I THOUGHT THAT YOU MIGHT LIKE IT.
Candlewitch
7 months 1 week ago
Thank You,
Dearest John... I Loved it, and the fact that you wrote it for me is delicious, indeed! xxx Cat
Rula
7 months 1 week ago
Hello sir
This is really a good poem delivered with urgent message that I hope that to reach as many readers as possible.
I am not sure if you wanted this as
On(e) with the tyranny
As I thought you're listing different types of oppression.
As I said this is universal and I salute you choice
Thank you for sharing.
Leslie
7 months 1 week ago
Rula
your comment accepted and appreciated I know you understand tyranny what happened to these people was horrible. there are many that suffer from intolerance in our day my goal in this phone was set this in the forefront thank you for reading
Triskelion
7 months 1 week ago
The old man..
...used to say "we're not so long out of the trees." Considering the subject of your piece, I say we're not even out of the woods yet. Maybe we've outgrown the boogyman, but we still sound the warning bell for the same end game just because it works. This is a piece to ponder on (if only every person could fathom it)
Thomas
Leslie
7 months 1 week ago
In The Dark Night!
I must agree with you. We haven't reached the boundary where such atrocities are displaced. If i were a betting man I'd say we'll never get there. Mans inhumanity to himself will not allow for that!
Leslie
7 months 1 week ago
Thomas!
Thank you for noticing and commenting!
Punkyfrewster
1 month 1 week ago
Leslie
A terrific handling of a heinous past! Congratulations on the win! It will put your words before more people.