Dark Road

Took a turn at the end of a dark road
Best place for my burdens to unload
Strangled my feelings until they died
Buried them way deep down inside
Pressure down on me until I am broken
Tortured by love words never spoken
Drowning in my own suffering pain
Burning me like a never-ending flame
Sacrificed my cold blood on the floor
For the love I have never felt before
In an empty dark, no heart can be found
Suffering through hurt with no sound
Silent eyes look on me with forebode
Made me take a turn onto a dark road

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Southwest United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Jim Morrison, Sylvia Plath

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neopoet

1 year 8 months ago

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Candlewitch

1 year 8 months ago

dear Depressed,

I have not read many poems with rhyming couplets (2 by 2 by 2 etc.) that are not choppy and clipped...yours is one of the few...great job. you get your ideas delivered in a plain and smooth function! very nice. by-the-way, your poem is quite relatable!! great job!

*hugs, Cat

Depressed 1

1 year 7 months ago

Thanks

Thanks for reading and your comment.

Lavender

1 year 7 months ago

Dark Road

Hello, D1,
Your poetry is always straightforward with few words, but full of meaning and emotion. The rhythm is smooth and the rhyme is logical and not forced. I especially like the first and last lines, the way they parallel each other and wrap around the entire poem.
Thank you,
L