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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Apr 24, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Date With Wine

Dating is not a game
To be played like a toy
It’s not a cat and mouse chase
Among men and women

Dating is not a wine treasury
To quench thirsty desires
It’s not a lust filled vessel
To be tasted like aged old wine

Dating is not to be taken casually
For sports and entertainment
It’s not a stage for performers
Pursuing fame

Dating is a vineyard
Before nuptials
Beholding the wine not its redness
Discerning maturity

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 2 months ago

Babara

A truly thought out piece of writting.
Please if you don't mine, just one thing
you established in the first stanza that this is your thoughts on dating and what it is not.
I believe that you don't need the phrase "Dating is not " after it's initial entry in the poem.
bring is back at the end as the opposite is perfect.
that's just my opinion.
I'm just a novice at this.

Dating is not a game
To be played like a toy
It’s not a cat and mice chase
Among men and women

Or a wine treasury
To quench thirsty desires
It’s not a lust filled vessel
To be tasted like aged old wine

It cannot to be taken casually
For sports and entertainment
It’s not a stage for performers
Pursuing fame

Dating is a vineyard
Before nuptials
Beholding the wine not its redness
Discerning maturity

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 2 months ago

Barbara

I re- read it,
I believe that in stanza 1 line 3;
"It’s not a cat and mice chase"
It should be; "cat and mouse" in the singular
Sorry but I notice it in the second reading.
Respect to you my friend

Pixee

Pixee

14 years 2 months ago

Hey Barbara

I read your poem and I did't find any problems with it. I enjoyed reading your poem it gives out a message in your own way. I thank you for the read. Keep on Keeping on. Read you later.

Friends,

PIxee

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 2 months ago

Pixee

thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate and glad you liked it

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

14 years 2 months ago

Barbara!

If only this was true in practice... more love and less hearts broken
more respect and less date rape....
more getting into the prenuptial discernment
rather than cheap one-nighters, STDs, teasing and sleezing....
more marriages less live-ins, less divorces... and it can go on...
Wisdom and metaphorical beauty... I confess to have thought of
an alcoholic and their imminent date with the bottle... but not so!

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 2 months ago

Yeah now that woul dbe nice

I didn't realize dating had so much drama these days. When I dated back in the day life was simple. If you like someone you approach them. If it worked it was all good. if it didn't then you move on. I wrote this poem as my two cents to a dating topic my friend posted. It had almost 200 comment the last I participated.

Geezer

Geezer

14 years 2 months ago

I totally agree...

with the comments made by Eddie, Pixee, and crypticbard. Great theme, and thoughtful write. I think that anyone who gets a date with you, is a lucky man. ~ Gee

M

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Barb

I would like to come back to this one after one read. I need to read it again as the first thing that came to my mind was..Just what was that date on that good old bottle of red anyhow:) chuckle...I used to love that good wine and those romantic moments......lol

I will be back gal and hope all is good by you

Love and blessings

Mona