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Day with God (Dream)
You met me in my dreams,
I tried to hug you,
I tried to you catch you,
But my hands were shaking all the time,
My hands were shaking all the time...
Then I ran towards you to touch your feet (Indian Tradition to show respect),
But I wasn't able to touch your feet,
you are so great,
And I am so small in front of you,
Each and everything in this world is you,
I tried to you catch you,
But my hands were shaking all the time,
My hands were shaking all the time...
Then I tried to hold your piece of cloth,
It was like a lightning and thunderstorm,
when the lightning passed it's make me feel joy,
Then I tried to you catch you,
But my hands were shaking all the time,
My hands were shaking all the time...
My whole Soul becomes pure,
I felt you inside me,
I felt black cloud disappears and sky was blue again inside me,
I think you left me alone because you was thinking I am getting mature,
Schrey started finding you again in his dreams,
Then he saw a light,
Then he tried to catch you,
But his hands were shaking all the time,
His hands were shaking all the time...
About This Poem
Last Few Words: It was my weird dream.
Style/Type: Free verse
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Lavender
4 years 7 months ago
Day With God (Dream)
Hello, Schrey,
So beautiful. It feels wonderfully personal, yet something that I'm so glad you've shared. I had a dream of meeting God once, also. It will always stay with me. Very beautiful.
Thank you!
Lavender
Schrey
4 years 7 months ago
Thank you very much!! Schrey
Thank you very much!!
lovedly
4 years 7 months ago
hi Ischrey
Then I runxxxx ran,,,,, towards you to......
But I wouldn'txxxx wasn't ... able......
partly read
the rest edit you may
more may read you then just pray
ISCHRAY
a merry good day
Schrey
4 years 7 months ago
Thanks for letting me know.
Thanks for letting me know. Thank you