The Day I Set You Free

I will never forget
The day you were born
It was Valentines Day
Four in the morn

I held you in my arms
For the very first time
And you were so special
I called you my little Valentine

I embrace you're fragile
Tiny fingertips
Then kiss them with
The softness of my lips

I then gently touched
You’re cute tiny nose
Then counted every one
Little fingers and toes

I still smell the scent
of your soft skin
and hear the sighs
of your every whim

On this special day
As I gaze back in time
Memories of the heart
Play gently on my mind

The love you brought
Into my very life
I had to let you go
To one who is the Light

God took you to His heaven,
To His eternal home above
filled with joy peace and love
And plenty of angel hugs

One day your love
Will come back to me.
Loving, you was the day
I set you free

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I wrote this poem in memory of my daughter Tammy who passed on 10 years ago. Sharing few memories of her. Hope you enjoy!!!

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States of America, USA

Favorite Poets: Helen Steiner Rice

Comments

gregwa8

7 years 2 months ago

very beautiful

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Hello kitty

Welcome to Neopoet!
A plaintive, bitter_sweet piece.
I know how hard to write about such a painful personal experience, so good work!
In line 4 Stanza 2 I felt like the rhythm needs to be a bit smoother
Maybe?

I held you in my arms
For the very first time
you're so special that I called
you "my little Valentine".

Just a suggestion as you know. Hope you don't mind it and of course you can use it or leave it.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.

lovedly

7 years 2 months ago

nice warm welcome

perhaps a minor edit
don't mind it may be me only
embraceD you're(your)