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THE DAY THE POETS DIED
I heard the sound of pages turning
from writers' alcoves everywhere
where the dim night lights were burning
and poets laid their deep souls bare.
Then there came that final day
when verse and music both were done.
Had bards not heard their parents say
be sure to not look in the sun?
That fierce light burned their muse to cinders
and dried the ink within their quill
regardless of their age or genders
without vision they'd lost their will.
No more poems of nature's beauty
no more describing stars above
no writes of those who died for duty
no heart felt words about true love.
I still recall that final sunset
and how all the people cried
filled with sorrows and regret
on that day the poets died.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
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How was my language use?
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Comments
Barbara Writes
13 years 4 months ago
Love this
"The day the poets died" is a perfect title befitting your well written poem. Reading was a joy, right to the very end, then I got the quivers brcause If the sun like an eclipse of the light in the minds eye of a poet blind the ability to create great poetry like this one, would indeed be a sad day.
scribbler
13 years 4 months ago
hi Barb
Hesitated psting this because wes beat me to it , but he used the singular poet. Kinda shows how even 1 letter difference in a title can lead to such different poems I guess.............stan
Barbara Writes
13 years 4 months ago
I certainly glad you used it
The idea of all poets died really stand out. Brilliant poetry
Bonitaj
13 years 4 months ago
Scribbler!
A brilliant rendition of using the title to a good end!
How well you've captured the theme in this particular verse:
"That fierce light burned their muse to cinders
and dried the ink within their quill
regardless of their age or genders
without vision they'd lost their will"
BRAVO
scribbler
13 years 4 months ago
hi Boni
I hope not Too brilliant as the muse is negatively phototrophic lol............stan
China Blue
13 years 4 months ago
Stan
This is so very excellent, there is nothing I would add, suggest or change it is perfect
I actually felt saddened
Chrys
scribbler
13 years 4 months ago
Hello
There's a line or two that need some work but thanks for saying such kind words. Always good to have a poem elicit intended emotion..............stan