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Dec 02, 2024
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Day Unresolved
So un-asleep, the sheet’s
a beach of footprints
waiting for the tide.
Her shape question-marked,
crucified, an inquisition
scales her eyes.
Wincing at infinities,
she stares a spot
and picks at it.
Each star a prick,
a javelin
thrown across the centuries
makes waves
just deep enough to swim
before light breaks
her open skin.
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7 months 1 week ago
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Lavender
7 months 1 week ago
Day Unresolved
Hello, Ray,
Each stanza holds a different thought - but together they complete the tone of the poem. I'm a fan of using "un" words. To me, they add a softer, deeper reflection to the theme. Such a feeling of restlessness. Wonderful imagery, especially the first two stanzas.
Thank you,
Lavender
Ray Miller
7 months 1 week ago
Day Unresolved
Thanks, Lavender.