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Sep 27, 2015
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dead air
cool your jets
at the airport
try not to smile or frown
no joking
at the check in
they'll use your gag to hold you down
did you pack
your pants yourself sir?
how long are you in town?
if you have to look
at the airport
make sure it's at the ground
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Sparrow
9 years 9 months ago
Simon
A fun piece and made me smile,
I notice that it has been a few months since your last visit here, and as Neopoet is starting to expand we need some fresh words.
As you are from New Zealand it will give us another world to enjoy,
Yours ian.T
eliminist
9 years 9 months ago
Was transported to an
Was transported to an immigration queue, drenched in anxiety just by reading this - nicely done Sir
Rula
9 years 9 months ago
A fun read
indeed Simon, but wondered why "dead air" for the title?
ThEdges
9 years 8 months ago
oh this is fun to read!
My dad is a retired airline captain, so this was fun to me. He claims he'd have to go through "that awful line," too....and so refuses to fly because of removing his belt, maybe shoes, etc.... And I thought the form was great for kind of a quirky subj. Thanks for writing it! Best, Laura
Simon Smythe
8 years 7 months ago
Thank
you
Simon Smythe
8 years 7 months ago
Rula: I guess because...
Air = as in airport
Dead = as long as we behave like we're dead inside everything should work out fine
themoonman
8 years 7 months ago
Hi,
Really is a fun read, that is what I thought
before seeing everyone else's comment (which
I usually try not to read before commenting).
The airports in America are a nightmare, and
the last time I flew, I was taken aside to be searched,
in front of my then 9yr old, shoes, belt and patted all
over ... I suppose it could have been worse.
great little poem, sorry, you took me
there and got me typing lol.