Death Wish

Bury me
beneath the apple tree
I grew from seed.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: comma or not to comma at end of second line?!!!

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Comments

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Beki

that's splendid and thoughtful as well..we all are a progeny of Adam n Eve aren't we?...

faerybeki

13 years 10 months ago

Raj, interesting comment, thank you, I hadn't even thought the Adam and Eve thing, guess the apple tree brings them in eh? I love how the reader brings new meaning to a poem :) thanks again, much love Beki xxx

faerybeki

13 years 10 months ago

Thank you and your

Thank you and your grandfather too :) tis my pleasure to share, much love Beki xx

Geezer

13 years 10 months ago

I felt...

this was an excellent Haiku for the uninitiated. The thoughts were separated, yet fused together in meaning. Good work. ~ Gee

faerybeki

13 years 10 months ago

Thank you Gee :) much love

Thank you Gee :) much love Beki xxx

scribbler

13 years 10 months ago

Hello

After wearing my eyes out reading this epic, I'd have to suggest a period at end of second line lol. Some say more in 3 lines than I can fit into 3 stanzas...........stan

faerybeki

13 years 9 months ago

:)) Stan, you make me smile,

:)) Stan, you make me smile, thank you. A period eh? not a comma? still not sure if it does need something there or not.... lots of love xxx

weirdelf

13 years 9 months ago

my sentiments exactly

I do love very short poems that say so much.
I want no coffin, just to be buried in the earth and a tree planted on top.
Since there isn't such a tree as a poetry tree I guess any tree will do.

faerybeki

13 years 9 months ago

thanks Jess, perhaps all

thanks Jess, perhaps all trees are poetry trees? :) when we're hugging trees I always tell my daughter to listen with her heart and she tells me what the tree says :) sheer poetry. lots of love xxx