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TG
The Gogetter
Feb 01, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Decluttering the Wardrobe

The look of the dress
clean lines.
The feel of the dress
too snug.
The pattern of the dress
busy.
The colour of the dress
bright.
The cut of the pants
flared.
The shape of the pants
hipster.
The fabric of the pants
fake leather.
The sound the pants make when I walk
swish, swish.
The shape of the top
very sixties.
The feel of the top
smooth on the skin.
The fit of the top
too firm for me!
Time for me to remove them all.
They're all too tight for me.
They've done their time
but now it's gone for me.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I put on some weight in the wrong places, and now these clothes no longer fit me. I wrote a poem about it. I felt so much better when they were removed from my wardrobe and placed in the good will bin. Hoping that another person will enjoy wearing them.

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: VIC

Favorite Poets: Dorothea McKellar, Henry Lawson, Banjo Paterson

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5 months 1 week ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Decluttering the Wardrobe" effectively captures the speaker's contemplation and decision-making process regarding their clothing items. The repetition of describing various aspects of each garment, such as the look, feel, pattern, color, cut, shape, fabric, sound, and fit, creates a sense of thorough evaluation. This structured approach helps convey the meticulous nature of decluttering and the speaker's attention to detail.

However, to enhance the impact of the poem, consider incorporating more vivid imagery or sensory details to evoke stronger emotions or connections to the clothing items being discarded. Additionally, exploring deeper reflections on the significance or memories associated with each piece could add layers of complexity to the poem and provide a deeper insight into the speaker's mindset.

Furthermore, you may want to experiment with varying the rhythm or structure of the poem to create a more dynamic flow and engage the reader further. This could involve playing with line breaks, stanza lengths, or poetic devices to add a sense of musicality or emphasis

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