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A Dedication to my soft beautiful bed
Lying in the morning
under my weighted blanket
any my fluffy blanket,
I dedicate my stillness,
my peace,
my serenity,
to the soft, beautiful mattress
and bed base.
The warmth and pleasure of that feeling
opens me up
to a sense of calm
and relaxation.
So I lie there
with my soft, weighted
sleeping mask,,
I bask in the sense
of relaxation
and I snuggle
under the fluffy weighted blanket
in a sense of sheer delight.
What a beautiful location
to be in.
What a wonderful sense of
freedom I have
while under that warm, fluffy blanket.
There could be no better emotion
than the state of sheer serenity.
The first time I felt the pleasure
lying on my soft, deep mattress,
was six months ago,
after Bruce put me under
and I slept soundly through the night.
Now, I know what that peaceful slumber
feels like
every night
and even early in the morning,
as I gently wake
to greet the day.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: The residue of the feeling I experienced six months ago, after the first clinical hypnotherapy session with Bruce resonates with me , as I lie buried under the soft, beautiful, plush fluffy blanket and the weighted blanket. My mind softens and reaches deep inside of me and I just snuggle under , feeling the beauty and pleasure while I am there.
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