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Mar 03, 2022
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deeper
I’d love to expect nothing,
but I take a deep breathe,
I carry on, reading books to
pass the time, on rush of
thoughts buried in my head,
flustered within, I’m torn
apart from reality, now I’m
deep diving into my own world.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=36x_JYwLuRY&t=23513s
Review Request Direction:
Is the internal logic consistent?
[This option has been removed]
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 4 months ago
This will...
lead one into a story that begs to be finished. Yes, the internal logic is consistent. One criticism; on wards is supposed to be one word: [onwards]. ~Geezer.
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Candlewitch
3 years 4 months ago
hello,
this work of self discovery is fantastic and begs for more. I would love to see you continue the story!
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy
*
Tracey Underwood
3 years 4 months ago
Loved it
This is great for feeling the plight of the soul. I would love to see you expand on it and bring it out more. Great job!