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Define: psychosis
When told I had psychosis,
the first thing I did was ask what it is:
I thought maybe a coma,
where you can still think and act,
and why being thrown into a cell with glass walls
would fix that.
I thought of something out of Psycho,
and the fact that I needed four wardsmen
to dress me, although I screamed blue murder,
and the nurses rushed to inject me
with...anti-psychosis.
More-complex theories emerged upon consultation
where, it was suggested, the two halves of my brain
could not communicate with each other,
if in fact it could be proven that I had a brain at all.
Being convivial at times when it was appropriate to be serious
showed—not a lewdness or higher, more-positive intellect—
but rather a distraction, which untreated
would result in all forms of public misdemeanour.
“Psychosis” was defined in the 1840s
when it was thought peculiar to be unable to confide
one’s feelings to one’s fellow man.
When asked a simple question, such as
“What day of the week is it?”
answering factually would prove, at least, being attentive,
and assumed the social skills not to make a huge JOKE out of it.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a bit about my history. I have been an involuntary hospital patient on 17 occasions in the years 2005 to 2016. Life there is really sterile, boring and depressing. Clinicians try to diagnose you but have no respect for your emotional needs.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Candlewitch
3 years 6 months ago
hello Marcus,
it is very nice to meet you. I have mental and emotional and physical issues. so I can kind of relate to this poem. I like your title, it attracted me to reading your poem. the flow and language use are good. the content held my interest. I especially liked the ending ;) please write more.
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy
p.s.
I have a MALE alter ego named eddy styx, who writes dark poetry.
Marcus Ten Low
3 years 6 months ago
Candlewitch! thank you
Hi there, Cat
Thank you for your comment and for your feedback, I will hope to check your poems on this site and leave a comment back for you. Thanks especially for helping to make this a positive and loving community of wordsmiths.
Geezer
3 years 6 months ago
This is...
I am going to assume
that you have a firmer grip on reality than previously.
You seem to be doing well. I guess that many of us have problems in dealing
with the world these days, and I'm not surprised. It becomes more difficult
to believe in anything. I like how you have dealt with your affliction and become
able to tell us about yourself. I think you will find it easy to write about
things here and maybe explore yourself. I don't have any advice about this piece
of work, as it sems more of an introduction to us. Keep writing and exploring. ~ Geezer.
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Marcus Ten Low
3 years 6 months ago
Hello Geezer,
Hello Geezer,
Thanks for leaving your mark on my poem comments section!! Yes, it's certainly worth exploring ourselves and writing poems for others to understand us.
I will hope to reciprocate your kindness by leaving a comment on one of your poems too. Thanks for making this a strong and vibrant community of wordsmiths.
Candlewitch
3 years 6 months ago
hello marcus,
just a quick note to tell you that Geezer is one of our best poet/people for giving critique and comment. I strive to be like him...I've got a feeling that you could be just as good as our Geezer!
*hugs, Cat
Marcus Ten Low
3 years 6 months ago
Isnt he great! thanks for
Isnt he great! thanks for letting me know.
Marcus Ten Low
3 years 6 months ago
Isnt he great! thanks for
Isnt he great! thanks for letting me know.