Geezer

Sep 07, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Deja vue...

There, there it is again
A place in time, I'd touched before
Where, where in when, I'd been again?
I reached for it, trying to touch once more

Just out of my grasp, the feeling swayed
None else it could have been
The thought, indeed that it was played
But, I didn't know it then.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

Rula

6 years 10 months ago

Hello Geezer

This reads just like a dream or a dreamy feeling.
I especially liked this line:
"Just out of my grasp, the feeling swayed"

I always wonder why do poets choose a french title for an English piece. Just saying.
Thank you for sharing

Geezer

6 years 10 months ago

I was trying to describe the feeling of Deja vue ! I don't know that there is another word for, or words that describe the situation. I will think upon the idea and mayhap come up with a new title in English. ~ Geezer.
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Rula

6 years 10 months ago

I understand

thank you for explaining

lovedly

6 years 10 months ago

Deja vue is French word with NO Equivalence

means the same in all languages

Psychology
the feeling that one has had an experience previously, although it is actually new to one
2.
a feeling that one has been in a place or had a specific experience before

so your poetry is abs unique
Deja vue(ish)
great Gee

Geezer

6 years 10 months ago

Thank you...

for your comment and praise of my poem. ~ Geezer.
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raj

6 years 10 months ago

Hi Geezer

good theme in this short write...
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Geezer

6 years 10 months ago

Thanks...

raj, glad you like it! ~ Geezer.
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weirdelf

6 years 9 months ago

This is bloody gorgeous word-crafting, mate

the tone, feel, reach... that tantalising untouchability of the sensation.
You've caught it perfectly.
I couldn't resist a little reading, I hope my Aussie accent doesn't harm it.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/deja-vue-by-guy-geezer-caswell-1

May I post this gem to our Facebook page?

Geezer

6 years 9 months ago

Thanks, my Aussie Bro...

Actually, you are way too kind. I merely managed to get what I was feeling into the script. Your accent is just right for this. Gave me a bit of a chill hearing it in that Aussie/British tone. It so much reminded me of "A Clockwork Orange" or perhaps a scene from "The Wall" I like the echoing sound of the whole thing. Yes, yes, post it, if you will! ~ Gee.
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weirdelf

6 years 9 months ago

Don't bullshit me, you know I am never too kind.

But glad you like the reading, interesting comparisons. As in America Aussie has several different accents. From broad Aussie through city to countrified and bourgeois, I guess mine is the latter.
Posted on Facebook.

Geezer

6 years 9 months ago

Going to...

laugh out loud on that one! Yes, you can be a ... well, you know. But, thank you for the praise anyhow. ~ Gee.
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