Depths (revised)

for simple folks like me
you have to send notes to read your blossoming mind
and in the greenery fields of poetic lure
Cat none know any more
for sure
as you alone know all..

words used to total effect, and you know I value words.

Now, you know I'm not shy to crit, but I'm not sure how to crit the rest except as "too many adjectives".

I wish I could offer more constructive advice than to say "use less words"! Really, say what is happening without the cloud of adjectives.

If this doesn't make sense to you tell me and we'll talk about it.

the main thing I would suggest here is to remove the word ‘beautiful’
lol – it is a pet hate of mine – poetry is supposed to describe it without saying it – if you know what I mean

the rest – perfect
great alliteration
‘plunging… crystal clear pool
… secrets hiding
Under the luscious sapphire water’

and visuals with
‘lonely indigo shadowed yearning’

however, where begins ‘Meets with delicious aquatic forests’ to me seems fragmented… the thought is disjointed somehow… not continuing with the previous words
I don’t know if I am explaining myself clearly
maybe if you change
‘Of lonely indigo shadowed yearning’ to ‘where lonely indigo shadowed yearning…’
also the gerund
‘Revealing….’ – I try to avoid them…. perhaps ‘to reveal’
and the end also is disjointed (to me I stress lol)

also, imo, you have used too many adjectives - they detract from the thoughts of the write (for me anyway)

I didn't want to re-write – but I am having trouble explaining what I mean – so here goes please don’t take offence at my rudeness…

Depths
Plunging...
Into the crystal clear pool
Many secrets hiding
(Where) the luscious sapphire water
Of lonely indigo yearning
Meets with aquatic forests
Of rich emerald velvet desire
(to reveal) a haven of acceptance
Where the starlit silence
Of her fairy childlike devotion
(is) pure and resplendent in a swirl of melding

This tide pool of loving...
The meridian of many an unchained soul

great ending btw
love judy
xxx

I often allude to "nightmare imagery" but this poem is made of "great dream imagery". It's bright, warm, and the form never distracts from your words or their meaning. Very nice work.

Ron