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DESTINATIONS
Far up in a cobalt sky
appears a long contrail
whose metallic maker carries hie
folk, with each a different tale
Some, I'm sure, are on a quest
on this clear winter day
to their business rivals, best
as they practice just what they will say
Others are vacation bound
maybe to a tropic shore
where tensions will become unwound
and worries thought about no more
A few up in that speeding speck
wearing sad and quiet faces
go to give a last respect
and pass upon lost souls last graces
And young men with faces grim
returning to a distant war
hopes and worries go with them
do they question what they're fighting for?
A smiling couple, honeymoon
where they'll test wedding bed springs
and every day they'll sleep till noon
as their new love grows and sings
Then the other lucky few
in that coach so far above
who have someone just like you
to whom they return with love
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
hello shirl
I live beneath the flight path of an airport about 100 miles away. I often wonder where the silver specks are taking people and why. Thanks for coming by...............stan
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
greetings Jayne
Hie = to proceed in a hasty manner. The term is kind of dated(like me lol) but can come in handy at times. I'm pleased you like this...............stan
weirdelf
14 years 5 months ago
You know what I really like?
Poetry that is good to read. I despise WH Auden with his obscurities and classical references. This is a human poem and I love it.
L3 whose metallic maker carries hie [high?]
oh, you just explained it to Seren
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
Jess
we may disagree on some things but at least we agree on the lack of interest in obscure writing lol. Good of you to drop in and hope you're doing better...............scribbler