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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Aug 11, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Diamonds or Doughnuts (revised) 08-13-20

Diamonds Or Doughnuts
(for Steven)

my heart is pressed
between the pages
of the book of you.
I see only darkness
without the light.
from your wood-smoke
colored eyes,
your soft deep voice
carries me like
a dappled daydream
over the treacherous
rocks of my perilous day.
it is your calm
sagacity which
holds my fragile sanity,
and keeps it within its
clockwork frame.
your eternal knowing
of Me keeps me
from shattering into
a thousand shards.
and I would not trade
you for diamonds nor doughnuts

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

Thank so much, Jerry,

I was sure that you would be able to relate to this little poem of mine, as it was written straight from the heart :) thanks so much for telling me. I really appreciate that. you have a great day!

*hugs, Cat

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c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

Cat

your wording as always is so descriptive and perfect I love this poem what a wonderful tribute to Steve

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

thank you Chrys,

you know from personal experience, just how much I adore him ;) I'm not sure just exactly what he sees in me, LOL!

love ya, Cat
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c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

cat

he sees what I see a beautiful generous soul

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

Dearest Teddy,

aww...you are so sweet! you know me very well. and that makes you special to me also. just keep on being you!

love ya, Cat
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raj

4 years 11 months ago

Hi Cat

many have already commented before me and I agree with them....all i can say is that it really seems coming from heart and you have expressed it without mincing words...wishing you and Steve a very long and continually fruitful wedded life ..

much love and warm hugs..

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

raj, you darling!

thank you so much! you are always so kind! thanks for the good wishes, too!

*hugs, Cat
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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

I do believe...

that while many may express the thoughts and terms that you have, that none may really know them until they have been married for a lot of years. They may genuinely believe every word that they say, but, "the proof is in the pudding". You have the "pudding". ~ Gee.
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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

Well...

I'm sure that she looks right around your big ego and finds the kind hearted, genteel man that you were when she met you and waits for you to bring her her Oh Henry's. Seriously, anyone who has managed to stay married to the same person that long, has to have some redeeming qualities. I guess she sees them. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

Steve says:

we haven't killed each other yet, so we must be doing something right! LOL!

*hugs, Cat
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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

Who knows...

what lurks in the mind of a woman? The "Big Ego" knows. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 11 months ago

thanks Teddy!

for the suggestion, I will keep that in mind for my next posts. I'm glad that you are getting to know eddy styx. just be careful...he isn't sane, LOL!

*hugs, Cat
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scribbler

4 years 11 months ago

" of me keeps me"

Well everybody else has left me lacking in praise of a poem baring your soul about your life's love. So I'll only suggest changing the first "me" to ME so as to emphasize his knowing the real you.