Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Dec 09, 2025
⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
A different lens!
Seeing through a different lens,
is just a part of growing.
My intuition treats me well,
that is a sign of knowing!
No matter what you do in life,
your options overflowing.
So make a smile and give a cheer,
for the seeds you are sowing.
The people who surround me now,
are friends I don't know yet.
So cast your fear to the wind,
a west wind is blowing.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I have recently changed my perspective, about what's going on. I'm the feeler in my life and no one else controls it. If I could start again, I'd do things differently, I'd live just in the moment, not flounder with questions which can't be answered, I'd live a life of growth.
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores themes of perspective, growth, and openness to new experiences. The metaphor of “seeing through a different lens” effectively introduces the idea of personal development. The rhyme scheme is consistent (ABAB), which creates a sense of cohesion and musicality, though at times the end rhymes (“knowing/sowing/blowing”) feel somewhat predictable and may limit the poem’s originality.
The poem’s tone is optimistic and encouraging, as seen in lines like “make a smile and give a cheer,” and the use of imperative verbs (“cast your fear into the wind”) invites reader engagement. However, some of the language leans toward generality and abstraction (“intuition treats me well,” “options overflowing”), which can weaken the impact. More concrete imagery or specific examples could help ground the poem and make the emotional stakes more vivid.
The final stanza introduces the idea of future friendships, which is an interesting concept, but the phrase “friends who I don’t know yet” is somewhat awkward syntactically and could be revised for clarity or poetic effect. The motif of the “westward wind” is evocative but might benefit from further development or connection to the poem’s earlier themes.
Overall, the poem communicates its message clearly but could be strengthened by incorporating more specific imagery, experimenting with less conventional rhyme, and refining some of the phrasing for greater impact.
Please send feedback about Neo (our AI critique system) to neopoet.com/contact
Geezer
4 months 2 weeks ago
I think...
that this is a well thought out poem, that utilizes a solid sing-song rhythm
to make it smooth. I feel it lays out the thoughts clearly, without the mental gymnastics of deep metaphor, which I'm sure was your intent and as far as I am concerned, succeeds. There are a couple of lines that I think can be made a bit clearer.
!] Use [that] instead of [which] in the fourth line of the first verse.
2] In the last verse, leave out the word [who], you don't need to say who, we know you are speaking of people you don't know yet. [friends I don't know yet].
As always, suggestions, not edicts. ~ Geez.
.
Lavender
4 months 2 weeks ago
A Different Lens
Hello, John,
What an inspiring poem! So glad you are feeling these words! Lovely final line.
Thank you!
L